My friend Jody was nice enough to look over
Seeing Spots and beta it for me. Following her advice, I added a new first chapter which has more dialogue and less introspective, internal monologue-y stuff-- more showing and less telling, in other words. I think it flows much better now. I've been playing around with it all day, and will probably take a break soon, and get back to it later. Still, I'm very happy with how much I've accomplished on it today.
Some friend, making you work like that!
ReplyDeleteWell, making me do work I need to do is definitely a good thing:-).
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